Research Reflection

Maritza Roman

Professor Jennifer Zukowski

English 121

December 3, 2015

English is a hard subject for me which lead me to set many goals for English 121. I had too many goals but only focused on three. I focused on writing strong thesis statements, being able to browse the web to find legit websites and helpful information, and on organization. I’ve always had trouble coming up with a good and strong thesis statement. Unfortunately, I still need practice on creating an effective thesis statement. I looked at many tips but I believe I have to take a minute and think thoroughly about what I want to talk about. I also need to be specific when creating a thesis statement. Maybe when I am able to do this I will improve my thesis statements. On the other hand, after doing the research paper I can say that I have improved my web skills. I liked using Wikipedia because it is easy to understand and provides a lot of information. Though I thought it was a good website it is not a good website to use on essays. I found many proper websites, such as, database and WebMD. I was also able to analyze the websites to determine whether they were proper to use in my essay. This skill will continue to be helpful. Whenever I browse the web to find information about something I will be able to know if the information provided can be trusted. I think I improved on organizing my ideas and placing them on the right paragraphs. However, I can still work on organizing paragraphs on the right sequence.

In English 121 we did an argument essay. Mine was on cosmetic plastic surgery on teenagers. At first I was for it but to my surprise after doing a lot of research it changed my point of view on the topic. I read many articles that explained why plastic surgery at a young age might not be the best decision. All the new information that I was reading was very interesting. Throughout my research I came across many stories in which women who are now adults had plastic surgery as a teenager and after they matured they regret getting it. This was something I did not know. I have always thought that since it was something they wanted they would always love it. I realize it is just like any other thing.

Doing the research paper made me realize many things and it also made me think differently. I enjoyed finding new information and reading the experiences that the young women went though. I read many things that could support my argument but I was skeptical on some of the websites. There were some sources that I think were great to add to my paper but after analyzing them well I decided not to include them because I was not sure if they were credible. It was a little disappointing that I was not able to use them. It was difficult to find good sources and to write some information in my own words since I did not understand some of the articles writing. However, I really liked that while doing the research process I improved on using different keywords to have specific information. I spent a lot of time doing research because there were times where I was not able to find what I needed. For me it was not enough time and it was probably because I spent way too much time looking for the right source. Next time I will try to spend less time and focus on the big picture and not so much on details.

One thing that I did notice that was very helpful while researching about plastic surgery was that when I did not find what I needed I would use different words to what I had. It would give me specific information about my topic. For example, when I did not find information about the risks in some articles I would look for them specifically in another search. Using keywords and different words that mean the same as the terms used before are very helpful when researching. This also helps the research process go a lot faster. I could have used more time on the whole process of researching and writing the paper. I could use help finding more websites that can be trusted like WebMD and database. I really liked these two websites.

Reflective Essay

At the beginning of the semester I was a bit nervous about taking English 121. I had already realized learning a second language would be difficult. Every time I looked at the syllabus, I worried how I would get through all the assigned topics. However, my goal for this class was to develop my writing skills through the blog assignments, exemplification essay, and research essay, so I got to work.

During the semester I learned how to create blogs, how to search database resources, how to do MLA formatting, and how to write research papers. From this class I have come to understand that brainstorming and layout are the most helpful ways to begin any type of paper.

During this semester, my first achievement was creating blogs. Writing blogs was a new experience for me. At first, it was hard for me to understand the assignment, but when I followed the guidelines given by my instructor, it became easy. Working on a blog in a group helped develop my conversation and discussion skills.

Writing the exemplification essay provided another new experience. At first I felt comfortable with the assignment, but it turned out to be difficult. I did not have a enough details to write about my topic. I tried hard, though, and gave more time to revision. During this assignment I realized that reading various sources is very helpful to develop one’s writing ability.

The most interesting task during semester was the research essay. The various parts of the research process, the prospectus, the annotated bibliography were interesting and came easily for me. I did a lot of database collection for the paper and spent a great deal of time searching relevant sources. During this assignment, I followed the instructor’s guidelines and read a lot of papers. After completing the assignment, I realized that reading a lot of resources is most helpful for writing research papers.

Additionally, in English 121 class I got the chance to discuss the papers and assignments in a circle of friends. I came to understand that reading a friend’s paper and giving them feedback is a great way to develop our writing skills. If I can find the mistakes for others I can correct those mistakes in my own papers.

The variety of assignments helped develop my writing skills. I feel my ability to organize my writing with proper grammar and phrasing has been increased. To develop my writing skills further I need to focus on reading more in order to make fewer mistakes.

In my view, the best part of my research paper is the way I organized the ideas. I think the way I supported the main topic with a variety of evidence was also a strength.

At the beginning of the semester my computer skills were not very strong, but now I have the confidence to search relevant scholarly sources for my papers.

During the research process, the thing I enjoyed most was the actual research, reading papers gave me the chance to learn new facts.

In addition, the thing I most disliked about research process was sorting through a massive number of sources to find relevant scholarly papers.

The most helpful tips I can offer other English 122 students writing research papers is to read sources critically and to use statistics to support their thesis.

 

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By: Irina Pokharel

Research Reflection

It has been eighteen years since I graduated from college in South Korea. I came back to school again, but surprisingly, this time in the United States. Going back to school is very exciting and also extremely frightening at the same time because English is a second language to me. I have lived in America for two years, but I am still not confident in English. This English class was a big challenge for me. Basically, my goal was to write and understand the language better. I took ESL classes before at FRCC. It was a good program, but I felt something was missing. There was a limit to learning English for beginners. I wanted to go further. I wanted to evaluate myself while taking this class. Although writing in English gave me tremendous stress, I have learned a lot. My stress about writing in English has been alleviated a little bit, and I seem to have a better sense of how to write in English.

Writing the research paper was stressful and a big challenge. It required a lot of time and work to finish. I wanted to write about my country, South Korea. The research I did in this class focused on what caused high suicide rates in Korea. Since I chose a topic about the suicide rate in Korea, I had to go through many news articles to find relevant materials for my research. I was very surprised that teenagers’ suicide rate, caused by poor academic performance, is very high. Although I had already experienced the Korean education system, the competition seems to have become more serious. If I did not research this topic, I would not have understood why so many Korean students commit suicide. The most striking realization I came to was that Korean society has many big problems. For example, the competitive educational environment, lack of jobs, and lack of welfare systems are all becoming more serious problems than I thought. I had a lot of difficulties when I prepared the research paper. At first, I just wasted a lot of time reading articles because I did not know how to start a research paper and what kind of sources I should cite to support my opinion. I spent a whole day and only wrote just a few sentences, which was so frustrating. However, I was able to select good information over time. Absolutely, it was very important to take time to prepare a research paper.  After choosing sources, it was difficult to paraphrase them in my own words because I do not have a rich English vocabulary. Sometimes I used the wrong words. One thing I did well in my paper was to organize it by age of suicide victims so that readers could better understand what happened to teenagers, young adults, and elderly people.

My professor, Jennifer Zukowski, pointed out that my grammar is awkward. I think this is because I think in Korean first and then translate to English, so my grammar has a Korean style. My tutor has helped me a lot to fix incorrect grammar. I need to increase my vocabulary and practice writing in English directly without first thinking in Korean. I know that I still have a lot of improvements to make, and I will try harder to write a good paper. This English class was good preparation for writing more essays. While I was preparing this research paper, my fear of English disappeared a little, and I gained some confidence. Writing a research paper was hard, but it was worth it. I enjoyed this class and I have improved my writing skills, which will help me with my writing in the future.

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Blog Post: Rubric Criteria

1. Coherence: I tried to write my research paper with order. I am sure that it is easy to follow.

2. Use of counterargument: I need to construct my counterargument is well expressed.

3. Organization: I need to reorganize  my conclusion which is finished a little bit abrupt.

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Rubric Criteria

I need to look back at my argument because I don't think it's clear and I don't think they support what I think is my argument.
I also need to add more to it because it is only four pages.
Another thing my paper is missing is doing in-text citation.

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Blog post

At first, I need to work more on research sources to relate with my opinions. My paper is not appropriately arranged..
 I am not sure that thesis statement and supporting paragraphs are related or not.
I do not think my paper has enough clarity.
However, I have given credit to each source.

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By: Irina Pokharel

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Blog Post-Rough Draft Improvement.

• 3 ways I Improved my Draft.

         1. I improved my counter argument with examples.
         2. I used more data to improve my opinion.
         3. I fixed citation to fit MLA format.

• 3 Ways Maritza Improved her Draft.

         1. Maritza improved F.P in the conclusion.
         2. She used more statistics for details.
         3. She is working on worked cited

Rough Draft Improvements

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Improvements

One way that I improved my draft was by adding a little more statistics to my paper. I also, changed the way my conclusion was organized. Oksoon made a comment that my F.P did not match the one from y introduction. She said that it should match because the paper did not make sense the way I organized it. Therefore, I changed some sentences in my conclusion. I have not yet but I am in the process of adding more information to my paper and adding all the sources I used to my works cited.

Irina improved her paper by organizing her paper a little different. She also added a little more information to it. It looks like she tried to add more of her opinion to it.

On my draft I make some changes on body paragraph by adding some more information, and I organized some of the citations.

I added more opinion on body paragraph, but I need to work more on it.

Oksoon change her last suppotive point, and she adds more details.

She adds more details to support counterargument.

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By: Irina Pokharel

Chapter 17

Integrating Sources and Avoiding Plagiarism

In this chapter it talks about how to avoid plagiarism. Sometimes it is intentional but other times it is unintentional. It gives us many tips which are very helpful. Sometimes I caught myself plagiarizing but sometimes I don't. This chapter will help me know if I do or not. I learned that even if we paraphrase we have to document the source. Also when paraphrasing we cannot include our own opinions. I used to think it was alright to include our own opinions in this section but I was wrong. I think that everything in this chapter is very important. It is a great guide and it gives great tips on how to paraphrase, summarize, quote, and synthesize.

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Integrating Sources and Avoiding Plagiarism

In this chapter, I was stucked about quoting the writer's statements. Whenever I have to write ideas from other sources, I got hard time to know the idea of quoting. In this chapter, I learned various ideas about importance to give credentials to the authors.
The main theme of the chapeter is to give knowledge about plagiarism. This chapter has lot of ideas with various examples about summarizing, quoting, and paraphrasing to avoid plagiarism.

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By : Irina Pokharel

Chapter 17: Integrating Sources and Avoiding Plagiarism

Personal Reaction:
When I was reading this chapter, I noticed that plagiarism is a very serious issue. If I plagiarize on purpose or by accident, both are not acceptable. I learned how to utilize sources that I selected for my research paper without plagiarism.  I did not know distracting it was if I used too many quotations. I think paraphrasing and summarizing are difficult for me when I cite someone's ideas and opinions because I have to use my own words. I should learn many synonyms and take time to research sources.


Professional Reaction:
The most important point in this chapter is how to avoid plagiarism. How can we prevent plagiarism?This chapter provides three ways: paraphrasing, summarizing, and quoting. It is important that when we put together our sources in writing, use these three ways practically with a set plan and enough time.

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Definition:
     Ethos is based upon the credibility of the author. Ethos can develop the impression upon the readers.
     Pathos is based upon the one's emotions, views, and experiences.
     Logos is based upon the reasons. I think logos is the most strong point of view to support the argument. Logos is based upon the statistics, research, and facts.
S.B.S
Pathos:
     I have been traveled two of the national park in Nepal. I think I can persuade my readers with my visual experiences. During the trip I got the chance to analyze lot of biological resources like shrubs and herbs. I examined that more than 90 % of people depend upon the biological resources for food, and timber. I felt that saving each biological resources has great advantages for long term for the people and nation. Moreover, on the way, I saw the two spots where road was blocked due to landslides. In that area, I analyzed that landslide was due to the poor management system of agriculture, and degradation of forest areas.
Ethos:
      I was not so much familiar with  all the plant species, and nature of soils. however, during the field visit, i became familiarize with various vegetation, and the importance of vegetation to conserve soil quality with the help of my professor Man Kumar Dhamala. Professor also make me understand about qua-drat samplings, and analyzing the shrub vegetation. I also got chance to understand the relationship between forest resources and soil fertility on the slope areas.
logos:
    I believe that I cannot attract the reader's interest on my essays without any relevant facts, and data.
   
     

Blog Post: Ethos Pathos Logos

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Definition: Ethos is an applea to fame, expertise. By using ethos, I can convince my readers based on mutual trust.

Support idea: Mr. Han, psychologist, explains why South Korea has a high suicide rate among the Korean teenagers. 

 

Definition: Pathos is an applea to emotion, feeling. By using pathos, I can arouse my readers's emotinal reponse.

Support idea: If the government of South Korea does not fix the copetitive education system, Korean teeagers' suicide rate will not fall.

 

Definigion: Logos is an applea to fact. By using loges, I can provide accurate information to my leaders.

Support idea: According to this reseach, South Korea has a top suicide rate in OECD for eleven years in a row.   



 



Ethos, Pathos, and Logos

Ethos, pathos, and Logos

Ethos: 

It is the credibility of the author. This means how much of authority does the author have on the subject. Does the author know a lot on the subject or not. This usually helps readers determine whether a paper is worth reading.

Pathos:

This means persuading through the readers emotions. This can be used by the word choice used in the paper. It can change the way someone looks at a subject.

Logos:

This is the way of persuading by the use of reasoning. This is the part in which we give reasons to support our claim. It's probably the most important one to use in our paper.

S.B.S

Ethos:

1. I can get well informed on every single thing that I want to talk about, that way my readers will know that I know what I'm talking about.

2. I can set a tone.

3. I will also, include the opposite point of view which will let my readers know that I acknowledge the other point of view.

Pathos:

1. I will tell stories from teenagers who have had a cosmetic plastic surgery for themselves and turned out to be great.

2. Also, I will include stories from people who have had a horrible experience getting such surgery. This can either be from not knowing the risks and choosing a bad surgeon. Or from teenagers who have been bullied and get a surgery but still continue to get bullied.

3. I can include stories from what parents think about this and how they dealt with their teenagers getting the surgery.

Logos:

1. I will have a clear message on my paper.

2. I can include this in my paper by having good supporting evidence that will actually have an impact on my argument.

3.  I can also include this by having logic on my reasons otherwise this will affect logos and ethos, making my paper weak.

Chapter 16: Finding and Evaluating Sources

Actually I am very worried about writing a research paper which contains facts and statistics. Through this chapter, I have learned that the best place to find accurate information is the college library. Although I am living in a flood of information, still I do not know how to distinguish valuable information. It is not easy to sort out what information is true. I did not know that using Wikipedia is not appropriate. This chapter explains how to find accurate sources and how to evaluate them  to support a research paper. This chapter shows helpful ways of finding information in the library or on the Internet. This chapter also explains important things that I should keep in mind while evaluating sources such as verifying accurate, objective, current,and comprehensive information. I should take advantage of information for the purpose of my research paper. This chapter is the best guide for writing my research paper .

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Reading Response Chp.16

Finding and Evaluating Sources

        There are many things in which one can look at to determine whether a source is legit. One of the things that stuck out to me was the part that talked about how to determine if the source is objective. It tells how not to disqualify a source just because it is reflecting a bias. As I started reading this section I thought it was going to say that a source that reflects the authors bias should not be used. To my surprise it did not say this but it did say to what limit bias is fine. In my opinion the most important points in this reading are the how to evaluate sources. This is important because one has to know if we are using the right information. We shouldn't be using sources that do not look trustworthy. However, even if a source does look trustworthy we should still evaluate them. The reading gives great tips on how to evaluate a source and it is very helpful. 

Maritza Roman

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Chapter 16

It is helpful chapter to understand about Internet resources. Whenever I search some articles or journals for my paper, I always got stucked for long time. This chapter has lot of information which gives the idea to search relevant source for paper.

This chapter has lot of details which can be helpful to analyze about database resources. Finding the information in a website is easy, but finding credential facts is difficult. This chapter has good tips to understand about evaluating sources. The most interesting subject on this chapter is about comparison between Internet and library databases, which can be very helpful to analyze the source while writing paper.

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By Irina Pokharel

Video Assignment

Internet source evaluation

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Google is an easily accessible webpage which allows people to search for a lot of information on various topics. I looked up effects of global warming and I got various details.  When I was searching the topic on effect of global warming, some other information also popped out on the last page and side of the webpage.  It took my attention, but that was a positive effect for me, because in that way I got the chance to find out more details about global warming.  The website I looked has general details about my topic, and I think it is a credible website. The article is written by Alina Bradford and published on 17 December, 2014(11.15 pm ET). The author has cited properly and has given credit to other sources. The links I looked at have relevant information with depth which readers can understand clearly.  Writers have provided historical research data as well as recent data.  The article has provided details with facts and statistics.  The article’s purpose is to inform and persuade.

I have understood that global warming is caused by human activities.  The author has put a lot of details about how global warming is effecting our natural environment, species, and human health.

I searched for data based information on global warming, but it was hard to get fully textual information.  Finally, I got the article which was published in the Washington Post. I got chance to read some of the really interesting facts about the effects of global warming.  This article didn't provide many details, but it's has some good details about global climate trends. In this article, Mr. Lamborghini claimed that, “more intense precipitation will reduce water scarcity without noting the increase risk of loss of lives and property from the flooding."

Works Cited

“The Real Effects of Global Warming”. The Washington Post. The Washington Post, 19 sept. 2013. Web. 11 Oct. 2015.

“Effects of Global Warming.” Live Science.com. N.p., n.d. Web. 12 Oct. 2015.

By Irina Pokharel

Evaluating Internet sources

Part one

I have not decided about my research paper’s topic yet. However, I found some information about suicide rates in South Korea for this assignment. The site I saw was http://www.koreaherald.com/view.php?ud=20150830000310. I noticed that my county, South Korea, has the highest rates of suicide among Organization for Economic Cooperation and Development (OECD) countries. This site provides a lot of information about suicide rates compare to other countries. According to this article, the suicide rates among students are increasing.

Evaluation of Website

•      This site clearly states the author and organization name, The Korea Herald.
•       The purpose of this site is to inform. The information is not biased, it gives accurate      information to readers.
•    This site has been updated.
•          The link is relevant and appropriate for the topic.

Part two

The article I found from the database is “The Impact of Improving Suicide Death Classification in South Korea: A Comparison with Japan and Hong Kong.” This article also provides a lot of information about suicide rates in South Korea, but this article analyzes the topic more professionally.

Works cited

Chan, Chee Hon, et al. "The Impact of Improving Suicide Death Classification in South Korea: a Comparison with Japan and Hong Kong." Plos ONE 10.5 (2015): 1-9. Academic Search Premier. Web. 12 Oct. 2015.

Yoon, Minsik. "South Korea Still Has Top OECD Suicide Rate."Http://www.koreaherald.com/view.php?ud=20150830000310. The Korea Herald, 30 Aug. 2015. Web. 12 Oct. 2015.

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Evaluating Internet Resources

Part One:

Searching many things on Google is very common to do by many of us. I searched about cosmetic surgery affecting teenagers and there were many results. On the sides of this website there are no advertising but as soon as a link is open there are many advertising on the sides of the page. All the information about the topic is in the center of the page. The advertisements are a little distracting to me because when I see something moving I usually get distracted. However, sometimes there are additional information that can help and these are usually located at the left margin of the page. These are somewhat related to the topic but not exactly. At the bottom of the articles there's always information on where the author got their information from and some include certifications. The article provided all the sources that the author used. The site that I looked at looks credible. The Google result took me to a website called WebMD and the tittle name of the article I looked at is Teens and Plastic Surgery. In this article it tells why teenagers seek for plastic surgery. Would you like to know why? According to this article, most teens seek plastic surgery to improve their appearance or to increase self-esteem ("Teens and Plastic Surgery"). This article provided a lot of information that to me seemed credible looking at the sources. This article was is meant to inform and is an appropriate publication. 

Part Two:

I tried searching my topic on databases but it was really hard to find at least one article under the peer-reviewed journal section. At last I was able to find a source that might be useful. I noticed that on database there are no advertisements which is a really good thing. This shows right away that everything on database is professional and credible. Even though the source that I found does not give me the full text it tells me what it will be about. A part of the summary made me think that this would be a good source for my essay because it says "The second part of the book is probably the most useful since it focuses on specific body issues" (Eames). This can give a lot of information regarding the issues that surgery has. I know that everything said on this article is credible because it provides a source. The source that this article provides is named Consumer Connections. It has all the information needed to prove that everything is correct. Comparing it with the WebMD I have to say that to me both seemed like they have their sources in place. The only thing is that on the database everything seems more credible because not only it doesn't have any advertisements but it also provides all of its sources. In my opinion I like the database a lot more but there are not enough articles on my topic and on Google there are many articles about it. The styles are also a little different but similar in a way. The text is set up the same, however, on the right side margin they are way different. On the database it provides many useful tools which I love and on the WebMD it has many advertisements.

 

Works Cited

"Teens and Plastic Surgery." WebMD. Ed. Stephanie S. Gardner MD. N.p., 25 Jan. 2015. Web. 09 Oct. 2015.

Eames, Brenda. "'The Safe and Sane Guide to Teenage Plastic Surgery." Consumer Connections 26.3 (2010): 1-1 1p. CINAHL Complete. Web. 09 Oct. 2015.

 

By: Maritza Roman

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Blog Review #2

Among our class blogs, there are two blogs which I am very interested in. One is “Five Brains are Better Than One, and the other is “TECHNOGORGE”.

I think these two blogs have catchy titles which will cause people to be curious. The blog “Five Brains are Better Than One” also caught my attention with color. The soft red color of the blog attracted my attention. Otherwise “TECHNOGORGE” seems to have subdued color, but I think the gray color is compatible with the title perfectly.

These blogs did a great job, however, I chose “Five Brains are Better than One” based on the Blog Quality Criteria. This blog has a catchy title, attractive color, good structure so it is easy to find other links, and good writing.

Overall, “Five Brains are Better Than One” is good in appearance as well as easy to understand.

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Blog review 2

It was really interesting to look each blog from mine and other classes. When I was going through all the blogs I was cohered by every blog I reviewed. Most of the blogs seem to be more creative and clearly visualize, but among all "GiveUhDogABlog" surprised me alot. I noticed that my blog is so simple and need to make more fascinating and interesting. I understand and learned so many matters from this blog, which can help me to make my blog more creative.
     This blog(GiveUhDogABlog) has very organized layout. The blog can be viewed in chronological order. In our blog we have to scroll all the way down to view the content. However, in this blog we can take the glance at each topic by different formats like classic, flipcard, magazine, mosaic, sidebar, snapshot, and timeslide. Overall, this blog clearly reflect the every contents.
    In terms of writing also they are really good. Writings are well organized with excellent vocabularies and word mechanics. As for our blog I think we need to build up our word mechanics and try to use more complex vocabularies to develop our high academic levels. This blog has also got very attractive and funny pictures to attract the readers. Pictures have also visualize the contents of the writings. Moreover, there are some contents in this blog which is not labeled.
      At last, it is really attractive blog with best visualizations and writings. This blog makes me a lot to understand, which can help me to bring more clarity on my blog.

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By: Irina Pokharel

Blog Review 2

 

Creative Minds

      As I was looking at every class blog, one blog really stuck out to me for many reasons. The  way the blog is structure makes it really easy to understand. It looks neat and it also has a nice background. The blog that I liked the best is called Creative Minds. I also liked their tittle, I think that it's a good tittle. I could learn some things from this blog to make sure my blog looks nice as well.

      The blog has pictures on every single post which makes it look nice. It's not all about writting and by having pictures on every single post doesn't make it look boring. On the contrary it makes it look very interesting. On my blog not every post has a picture and that's something I should change. For example, on the outline I made for my partner I did not include a picture to the post. The blog Creative Minds actually included a picture to their outlines.

      Their writing is also well organized. It looks very proffesional to me. All their writing have a great structure which makes their writing easy to read and follow. The content it self is also well written. It all makes sense and most of the posts have a lot to say which is a good thing. There's plenty to read but not too much to make someone bored of having to read too much. I could probably write a little more on the reading responses.

      Overall, this blog is doing a great job. I like everything about the blog. They have a nice background, writing, and looks neat. It's also easy to understand the blog which I found difficult on some other blogs. I really liked the Creative Minds blog.

 

By: Maritza Roman

 

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Chapter 14: Argumentation

We often argue with friends, family, or co-workers in our daily life. For example, “Is a vegetarian diet really good for your health?”, or “Do second marriages have a higher divorce rate than first-marriages?” I cannot stake my claim with just my opinion.  A small argument could turn into a fight if I do not have logical evidence.  An argument is not a fight.  An argument is making a point about a subject and supporting it with evidence. What I learned from this chapter is how argumentation and persuasion are different, and I also learned that an argument can be supported with 3 types of evidence such as logic, ethics, and emotions. I am perplexed that I have to recognize how I can avoid many logical fallacies while writing an argumentation essay. I think the most important point in this chapter is choosing a debatable topic, and supporting the topic with evidence, which should be relevant, representative, typical, and sufficient.

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Argumentation

     It is really interesting chapter with lot of details, which can help to write strong argumentation paper. The most surprising point for me on this chapter was difference in argumentation and persuasion. The new subject matter I learned from this chapter is about deductive and inductive argument.
     This chapter gives main layouts to make strong argumentative essay, which includes various steps like;
- selection of topic,
-necessary to make debatable thesis statement,
-support the thesis statement by collecting different evidences,
-evidences should be relevant and sufficient to support the main idea,
-most importantly, credential for the evidence is essential while writing argumentation paper,
-lastly, opposing view point is important to make the paper strong.

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By: Irina Pokharel

Argumentation

An argumentative essay sounds very interesting. It can change the way one views an idea. Something that stuck out to me was that persuasion and argumentation do not have the same meaning. I always thought that they were similar. But by putting these together can give you a strong essay. Something I learned is that having the right topic to write about is very important. The topic should also have enough evidence to support the debate. The most important points here are how to use deductive and inductive arguments. It teaches us how to use them and personally it was a little hard to understand at first. It's a big part of the essay. I'm looking forward to writing this challenging essay. It sounds interesting to read and write about an argument.
Maritza Roman
http://reology.org/2012/07/yes-you-are-argumentative-if-you-do-this/

Irina's Thesis Statement

People should spend time in wilderness, and that will benefits them in different ways like intellectually, spiritually, and benefits to the whole world.,

Out Line
-Example 1 - Positive correlation between  nature and the intellectuality.
-Example 2 - A personal experiecne to practice spiritual in nature
-Example 2 - A reserch about a strong connection between nature and life

outline

English as a second language can be very frustrating and difficult.
1.Practice makes people perfect.
2. Reading the book which make you feel good and which you enjoy.
3. Try to make habit to use English in your daily conversation beside you own language.
4. Give priority to learn the basic structure of word, and arrangement of sentence.

outline

Love can be expressed in words, but it can also be shown in many little ways.

1. Make time for your loved one.
1. Phone calls
2. Picnics
3. Lunch
2. Random surprises.
1. Gifts
3. Cook for them
1. Special meals you normaly don't eat.
4. Support them

Logical Fellacy

1. Red Herring: The fallacy in which writer directs the reader from the main issue to another issue. 

2. How to avoid red herring?

- Keep in your mind about the thesis statement and the main topic sentence.

- Try to be logical as you move from one idea to another.

- Keep appropriate track on your ideas.

Thesis Statement

People should spend time in wilderness, and that will benefits them in different ways like intellectually, spiritually, and benefits to the whole world., 

Exemplification Essay Thesis Statement

Love can be expressed in words, but it can also be shown in many little ways.  

Thesis Statement

English as a second language can be very frustrating and difficult.

Exemplification

       Exemplification writting is a very interesting way to writte. After reading the chapter I learned many things. One of the things I learned is that using examples in exemplification is very important. It helps to prove your point and it also helps readers understand your point. Using a lot of examples makes your papper stronger. Another thing I learned is that the examples have to be well organized and the examples also have to good. Otherwise, the writting will end up being slopy with no organization. All this will be very helpful when I writte my paper. It'll be a little challenging for me but I can always refer to the book for guidance. It has many good writtings in it which I really liked. The most important thing that I have to keep in mind is that I have to provide many examples. I'm looking forward to it since it looks very interesting. 

Maritza Roman
http://bayantwopointoh.blogspot.com/2012/08/illustrating-exemplification-using.html

Exemplification

1. To show the main idea.

2. His experience many events where people were afraid of him.

3.  Staples walks the streets at night because he has insomnia.

4.  The power to frighten and intimidate.

5. Move with care, give enough room to people, and be calm in any difficult situations.

Purpose and Audience

1. "It was in the echo of that terrified women's footfalls that i first began to know the unwieldy inheritance I'd come into- the ability to alter public space in ugly ways." He implied it.

2. Combination of both. Its is appropriate because he mentioned both sides.

3. Racial profiling and discrimination. He challenged himself by being more careful.

4. He is trying to emphasize his main point and bring reader's attention. yes, he succeeded because his first sentence is intersecting and feel like to read more.

Style and Structure

1. To show more clearly with facts that people are afraid of black people. yes, he could but that sentence make his statement stronger.

2.It is an effective  way how  he start his explanation. 

3. Yes, a lot of examples. Yes, they are representative. 

4. chronological order.

5. assassin, bandit, criminal, gang member, gangster, goon, killer,rowdy, troublemaker.

Journal Entry

No.

 

Writing Workshop

3. Not too accurate. maybe he means that gangs get together to intimidate.

 Combining the Patterns

yes, several examples would have better explained how a youth becomes a thug, because there are various ways.

Exemplification

Personal Reaction:

    I learned a new subject matter in this chapter. before reading this chapter I did not have idea that i can write essay in exemplification format too. I knew that I can use examples in the body paragraph to support the main idea, but essay based on examples to persuade readers is new point that surprised me.

Professional Reaction:

    The ideas given in this chapter is very helpful to write exemplification essay. After completing this chapter I understand that how I should write essay with examples and complete my next assignment.

    At last, I came to learn the structure of exemplification essay. Most importantly, I learned that we can explain and bring clarity with use of examples. Additionally, we can be able to add interest, and persuade reader with the examples.

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By: Irina Pokharel

Chapter 8: Exemplification

I am taking an English class in the Boulder public library. There are many students from other countries: Japan, China, Russia, Mexico and Venezuela. We are not good at English, so when we talk to each other in English, we use a lot of examples to make each other understand. I think using examples is the best way to describe exactly what I want to say.

      After reading this chapter, I learned various ways to use examples in writing. I thought using examples is just a tool to help people understand. But what I was surprised about is that examples are also used in writing to add interest or persuasiveness. For example, I start a conversation with "Did you know?" when I want to get my friend's attention. I think speaking and writing use the same skill to attract interest.

      I think the most important point in this chapter is to learn how to use examples in writing properly following these strategies:

• Using examples to explain and clarify to help readers understand what topic is
• Using examples to add interest to keep the readers' attention
• Using examples to persuade readers that topic is valid, reasonable, and worth considering

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Thesis Statement

Making It More Specific:

• Does technology replace teachers?
• Advantages

Forming Arguable Sentence:

• Students feel like they don't need a teacher anymore since technology can do so much to answer questions.
• It seems like in modern world technology in education has many advantages. 

My favorite one:

It seems like in modern world technology in education has many advantages.

Thesis Statement

Green commuting is the greater way to decrease the environmental pollution, save the economy, and also improve the health.

Thesis Sentence

Thesis Sentence

Green commuting is not only environmentally frendly  but also heps to improve heatlh.

Blog Review

     We all have different favorite blogs. Oksoon's favorite blog is Underground New York Public Library. Irina's favorite blog is Mark Reads, and Maritza's favorite blog is Mental_Floss. We all reviewed them and came to a conclusion that Mental_Floss is the best one.
      In Mental_Floss blog, there is a lot of information in the different forms like interesting facts, big questions, hypersonic, videos, lists, and quizzes.In contrast, Underground New York Public Library has the good information about books, but it has not sufficient information. In Mark Reads blog it is a little hard to understand for us. Unlike on Mental_Floss everything is well  organized and easy to understand.
     In our point of view,  the Mental_Floss blog is  the most informative to follow. However, it is the people's choice which blog they want to follow.

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By: Irina Pokharel, Oksoon Park, Maritza Roman

Blog Role

RamblingsofArk.blogspot.com

FiveBrainsareBetterThanOne.blogspot.com

CreativeMinds276.blogspot.com

jamesthetheifgray.blogspot.com

sdegottalovepizza.blogspot.com

technogourge.wordpress.com

http://mentalfloss.com/

RamblingsofArk.blogspot.com

FiveBrainsareBetterThanOne.blogspot.com

CreativeMinds276.blogspot.com

jamesthetheifgray.blogspot.com

sdegottalovepizza.blogspot.com

technogourge.wordpress.com

http://markreads.net/reviews/

Outline

Introduction:
Thesis statement: "See, the e-blurt, like so many modes of personal expression, is all about power." 
Body
Supporting point 1:
"Im busier than you, hence I am more powerful than you."
Supporting point 2:
 Nowadays there is no proper signs of grammar while writting emails, like it used to be before a long time ago.
Supporting point3:
"If the reader cannot understand what you are saying in an email then that shows the work have done is incomplete"
Conclusion:
"Which only confirms what I've always felt about power; that the people who really understand it don't say anything at all."
By: Maritza Roman Irina Pokharel Oksoon Park

Arrangement

As I was reading chapter 3 many things captured my attention. I learned many things throughout. The first thing that stuck out to me was the title a”Arrangement.” As soon as I read it I immediately knew it was going to be helpful. Structure really captured my attention. I’ve had assignments where structure is not specified which made the assignment twice as hard. Knowing what structure to use in an essay always gives me a headache. Fortunately, the checklist the book has to recognize a pattern is descent to go back and use as a guide. However, when I read the checklist of what not to include in an introduction really surprised me. The reason why is because in a few of my past essays I’ve included some of the points mentioned. For example, “don’t apologize.” For this reason the main important points in the reading are the checklists in chapter 3. Even though, all the information given in the reading was great I wish “How to make a great thesis” was amplified. I know I'll learn this throughout the semester. Overall, I learned a lot in this chapter even things I thought I already knew.

By: Maritza Roman

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